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Love not Spoken Revealed
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Her eyes always spread warmth and hope to him
Perhaps that’s why he fell hard for her
Despite his realization of this love felt deep within his soul
He never spoke these words to her as the fear of being rejected
Terrified him to no end little did he know was that
Orihime the Weaver Princess felt the same fear for she loved him
The Protector Ichigo
But on a spring day they overheard each other whisper
I love you
Startled and shocked by these revelations
They both smiled the most beautiful smile they had ever seen
Which held love and hope for tomorrow
That would inspire each other everyday
Perhaps that’s why he fell hard for her
Despite his realization of this love felt deep within his soul
He never spoke these words to her as the fear of being rejected
Terrified him to no end little did he know was that
Orihime the Weaver Princess felt the same fear for she loved him
The Protector Ichigo
But on a spring day they overheard each other whisper
I love you
Startled and shocked by these revelations
They both smiled the most beautiful smile they had ever seen
Which held love and hope for tomorrow
That would inspire each other everyday
Was a gift for the Ichihime valetine's day exchange for gilrean-vardamir on tumblr. I felt like publishing it here. Hope you enjoy it.
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactIt was such a pleasure to read your poem again here and to have a chance to critique it. Your grasp of grammar is really good and it seems like you are very careful with your word choice. I believe you've mentioned before that you like to write free verse poetry, so it's nice to see this from you.
I'm not sure if there's much I could say for you to work on since poetry isn't really my forte, but one thing that struck me as rather odd was your line about Ichigo fearing that Orihime would reject him and that's why he didn't confess to her. Take this for what it's worth, but I don't think either of them have done anything up until now because the timing was all off. Ichigo's got his plate full at the moment trying to save the entire world and before that he was quite goal-driven yet only thought a step or two in ahead. I don't think romance has ever been high on his priority list.
However, I do understand that this in your interpretation, so I respect that. It's a lovely poem and I'm excited to see more from you as you hone your craft. <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b…" width="15" height="15" alt="
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